I sometimes write about personal experiences but this is definately one that pierced the personal and the public.
Thank you for sharing.
I like the fact that you recognize that you father used "80%..." as a way of distancing himself from emotion. When ever numbers are brought into an emotional piece they feel like ice water.
I would have like to have read the two last paragraphs from "Hello..." at the top, as the first paragraphs. The first paragraph is not strong enough for this story. It also immediately brings us to those hopes and fears that we all felt on that day. There is no worry that the rest of the piece won't hold our attention.
Thank you for this. It is well written and heart felt!
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Date: 2011-05-13 12:50 pm (UTC)Thank you for sharing.
I like the fact that you recognize that you father used "80%..." as a way of distancing himself from emotion. When ever numbers are brought into an emotional piece they feel like ice water.
I would have like to have read the two last paragraphs from "Hello..." at the top, as the first paragraphs. The first paragraph is not strong enough for this story. It also immediately brings us to those hopes and fears that we all felt on that day. There is no worry that the rest of the piece won't hold our attention.
Thank you for this. It is well written and heart felt!