Brigit's Flame June Contest Week One
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eiremauveTitle: A Wrong Turn
Author: eiremauve
Rating: PG
Warnings: None
Word Count: 187
Prompt: Bad Advice
A/N: This is terrible, I make no excuses. It could perhaps be good if expanded upon, though.
I really should have gone the other way round, but who can blame me? The map seemed to be accurate, at least from what I somewhat vaguely recalled, so I took the turn onto what should have been Spring Street a block away from my new house. Only it wasn't. I squinted at the sign and saw that it said "Jurassic Park Ave." Half expecting a velociraptor to attack me, I turned around swiftly. There was nothing, thank goodness. Now, at this point I would normally have used a cellphone, but I had none, so I resolved to turn back around and hopefully find someone who knew where I should go.
Only for some reason nobody did. So I went into the and rummaged around for a phonebook, those usually have maps. They did-but it was the wrong one. By this time I was hot and sweaty and starting to get annoyed. So following my own vague memories, I started off again.
Who knows how much time later I finally stumbled into the door and saw my husband.
"They really need to change the map" I said.
Author: eiremauve
Rating: PG
Warnings: None
Word Count: 187
Prompt: Bad Advice
A/N: This is terrible, I make no excuses. It could perhaps be good if expanded upon, though.
I really should have gone the other way round, but who can blame me? The map seemed to be accurate, at least from what I somewhat vaguely recalled, so I took the turn onto what should have been Spring Street a block away from my new house. Only it wasn't. I squinted at the sign and saw that it said "Jurassic Park Ave." Half expecting a velociraptor to attack me, I turned around swiftly. There was nothing, thank goodness. Now, at this point I would normally have used a cellphone, but I had none, so I resolved to turn back around and hopefully find someone who knew where I should go.
Only for some reason nobody did. So I went into the and rummaged around for a phonebook, those usually have maps. They did-but it was the wrong one. By this time I was hot and sweaty and starting to get annoyed. So following my own vague memories, I started off again.
Who knows how much time later I finally stumbled into the door and saw my husband.
"They really need to change the map" I said.
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Date: 2011-07-11 02:39 am (UTC)no subject
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Date: 2011-07-11 08:52 pm (UTC)Do phonebooks have maps? It's been so long since I looked at one. I loved the thought of them being around. :)
I have to agree with the narrator. If I had seen a street sign that said, "jurassic park ave." I would have expected some TRex to attack me.
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Date: 2011-07-12 03:41 am (UTC)edit
Date: 2011-07-20 02:48 am (UTC)1. When you start a new paragraph, use a tab or skip a line rather than just hitting enter.
2. "Other way around", not other way "round."
3. You might want to describe the scenery and weather some more as you expand this story. As it is I could not figure out why the narrator got hot and sweaty since you hadn't said anything about it being warm outside.
4. "Went into the and rummaged around" - went into what?